So far, I made some changes. First of all, I changed my option from option2 to option1. I couldn't find the best blog the fit on my essay and I was just wonder around my blog and realize it was kinda fit in with my essay so gave a shot. Maybe the reader for my reader's review may got confused on that ,,,(sorry). It's only three pages long so far but I think I can make it long as times go by.
I'm not sure I'm at right on the point on my essay, feels like I'm writing about different thesis or topic ..... (Hope not !!). My focus is what type of blog I have or blogger am I. Tried to find my one identity.
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답글삭제is blogspot not working? I posted a review yesterday and its not showing. Ugh this is frustrating.
답글삭제It says you deleted it ....
답글삭제i had another one
답글삭제I had one which I deleted because I didn't like it but then I made another one that was super long and it isn't even showing. Even if I deleted the second one its still not showing either way. I thought the second one was good because it covered most of your essay and I thought it was very detailed feedback but I don't think I can do the same with this one. I'll try.
답글삭제You have a great analysis of your own blog but you spend too much of your essay summarizing what West's Article is about. I think you should add more your own thoughts added to your evidence as well as some thoughts from West to back up your essay or to make an argument.
The conclusion at the end doesn't seem like a conclusion at all but more of an added informative paragraph. You might need to edit the conclusion a bit to sort of conclude your whole essay. Remember don't add anything new.
Great first paragraph. You give a lot of important details about English classrooms, how blogs relate to them, and how West talks about these two things. I think this does a good job of leading into your argument, and gives the paper a great start.
답글삭제In the next two paragraphs, you do a great job of describing West and de Almeida Soares’ writings, and how they apply to formal and informal writing. However, you need to talk about how West’s method applies to your blog. Your essay topic is about your blog and its identity, and your main paragraphs need to take all of your sources, like West and de Almeida Soares, and show how their arguments show up in your own writing. If you could tie these authors’ analysis into your blog, I think you’ll be set. You have a good understanding of both articles, and of your own blog of course. All you need to do is relate your paper a little more to the topic.
Overall, things are looking pretty good, but just need some clarification and some more relation to your thesis. Speaking of the thesis, yours is well written and very specific. Good job and good luck with revisions!